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Posted by Wanting someone to check this Role on August 9, 2000 at 09:27:14:

role + Searing blue flames begin to grow.
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role + No one knows the origin of X. The savage tribe that
role + followed Aryl'Khur found X among the Whistlewood swamp,
role + surviving by only the cunning of his combative nature. They
role + found him asleep, lying amongst the dead leaves in silence.
role + As they looked over him, they noticed a marking that covered
role + his entire back - the mark of a black widow spider. Extremely
role + large along his back, the large spider is designed in a series
role + of intricate tattoes. Staring constantly from the spider
role + are a pair of blood red eyes that match the dreaded fangs, that
role + seem to constantly drip from his own blood. Thinking that the
role + strange giant was possessed, the tribal shaman stood over
role + X with a spear, intending to impale his tainted soul. As
role + the spear fell like lightning towards his chest, X's body
role + begin shimmer and fade, only to reappear behind the shaman.
role + Completely stunned by the phasing figure, the shaman never saw
role + the large dagger that tore it's way through his heart. As the
role + body of the shaman fell lifeless, X stared around as the
role + others glared at him with a complete sense of hatred. His eyes
role + squinted with disgust as the leader stepped forth and demanded
role + X speak his name. X stood, silent. The leader asked
role + yet again, annoyed. X stared into the leader's eyes, his
role + face unmoving. Shrugging, the leader motioned X to follow
role + him, assuming X was mute. Looking around, unsure of what
role + to do, X followed in step.
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