Posted by wheeljack on March 23, 2000 at 11:56:48:
In Reply to: My desc, any help would be great. posted by Xzenlodan on March 21, 2000 at 07:49:57:
Hm, doesn't have the same ring as "never say never" In addition to the other points, take references to words like "always" and "most of the time". Think only of what a person would see at any given time. So also, take out the part about instruments changing, stick with nice instrument, it's usefully vague. not too bad though! > You are awestruck by the unmatched beauty
> of the elven lady standing before you. She
> smiles as she walks down the street, always
> seeming to be in a good mood. She is around
> five and a half feet tall, though she
> carries herself so well she appears taller
> than most men. Her body is lithe and limber,
> her legs long and smooth. She obviously
> takes the time to care for her body, though
> she does not show it off. She wears full
> elven dress most of the time, save when she
> is bathing, but she won't let many men catch
> her like that. Her hair is pulled back over
> her sharply pointed ears to keep it out of
> her eyes as she works. It is a shade of blue
> much like the afternoon sky. Quite the cont
> rast to her skin, smooth and almost shining
> in the sun, it is green like the waters of
> Darsylon, where she was born. In one of her
> hands she carries a nice instrument, though
> it is hardly ever the same one, her tastes
> in them constantly changing. In the other
> she carries a sword, the tool of her quest
> rather than her profession, she uses it to
> cut through the evils which would dominate
> Thera.