Posted by Proud Blade(VIP) on June 25, 2000 at 17:47:00:
In Reply to: Why I like Svy's desc: posted by Khiravn on June 25, 2000 at 17:15:30:
I agree that short descriptions are fine. And while his spelling/grammar needs work, from my conversations with Svy, I didn't get the impression that English was his first language, and I don't think writing style is nearly as important as content here. Cut 'em some slack.
What I don't like is how, at the end, his description tells me what I'm thinking. I remember looking at a (sleeping =P ) Svyatopolk and thinking "Ingvar certainly doesn't feel that way." How do I know he's given up a normal family life by looking?
Other than that (and at least half of the descriptions I've seen are guilty of this to some degree), it seems fine.
>Svyatopolk Dressed in shining armor and black cloak with silver Phoenix, and smiling as
>you approach this storm giant watches you closely to make sure your soul is
>not tainted with darkenss. He is about 4.1 m and his clear dark eyes seem
>to pierce your soul and bring out every wrongdoing. Then, his forgiveness
>washes your soul clean and you can walk away thinking about this guy who has
>given up family life for to fight for the Light to destroy Darkness and bring
>dawn to Thera.