Posted by Khiravn on June 26, 2000 at 11:17:17:
In Reply to: Is this why Svatopolk is disgraced? ;) posted by Bubba on June 25, 2000 at 11:31:17:
I don't care enough to put alot of thought into it, but, take another look:
> to pierce your soul and bring out every wrongdoing. Then, his forgiveness
> washes your soul clean and you can walk away thinking about this guy who has
> given up family life for to fight for the Light to destroy Darkness and bring
> dawn to Thera.
You *CAN* walk away thinking..
You can.
Not you do.
Not you think.
Not you feel.
You CAN.
That's pretty explicit. How you choose to respond to him is up to you, but one way to is to think on what he means.
2. There are *no* actions in this description.
3. You see a catholic priest. What can you assume about him? He has no wife. He has no sex. He has sacraficed a great deal to devote himself to God. You are in Thera and see a Maran. What can you assume about him? Blah, blah. There is absolutely nothing in this description that tells us things about his past we'd never know. It just builds possible assumptions you could make based on his appearance.
That being said, the grammer is bad, and I'm sure that's why he's subject to so much ridicule.
Anyway, by all means post your descriptions. I never pay attention to them in CF, even when I look at someone I just briefly glance at them, and I am curious what a description with no errors or situational assumptions (eg wearing clothes when he's unequipped) would look like.