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Posted by Daedric on November 29, 1999 at 21:54:56:

Humbly walking along this elf is quite short for his race standing only, five foot seven inches. You notice that his body is lithe as he draws in his emerald cloak. Drawing the cloak you notice his hands are permanently stained with, which appears to be black ink. Dressed more formally than most travelers, with dark blue leggings and a forest green vest with a cream shirt beneath. He is topped with a crimson plumed hat and that the feather is actually a pen. His golden skin shines like rays of sunlight. His deep blue eyes seem to complement his nature. Even with his kind eyes, they missed nothing as they roam the surrounding area.

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Ok well that went in a totally different direction, almost started world war 3. Daedric 21:07:17 12/03/99 (0)
Try this rewrite on for size Zebulost 22:13:31 11/29/99 (13)
- to be picky Gate is Gait Graham 06:02:51 11/30/99 (12)
  - Indeed. And complextion is complection. N/T Zebulost 06:21:47 11/30/99 (11)
    - Erm, try "complexion" N/T Pendragon_Surtr 17:22:48 11/30/99 (10)
      - n/t Um, ok. Funny, I found 'complection' at dictionary.com... 'complexion' has more references though. Zebulost spells neighbour with a 'u' 22:00:57 11/30/99 (9)
        
        Look here people, CF is in AMERICA, SO YOU'LL USE OUR SPELLINGS AND LIKE IT! no text, that is all Red, White, and Blue through and through 05:44:50 12/01/99 (8)
        
        You use our Flag's colours as well as our language, you may as well use the correct spellings for the words (nt) Union Jack 13:33:24 12/08/99 (3)
        
        No see we beat your redcoat wearing asses bad enough to warrant our dominion over you. nt Red, White, and Blue through and through 05:56:39 12/09/99 (2)
        
        Blow it out your arse, Yank Union Jack 08:08:25 12/09/99 (1)
        
        Get a dental plan Brit. nt Yank(ees) RULE! 11:52:32 12/09/99 (0)
        
        I don't think zo Americano, we vill spell it zee German way. Spracen dedoich (No Text) Heir Gerber 14:24:38 12/01/99 (3)
        
        You mean Sprechen die deutch? German Corrector 20:33:47 12/01/99 (2)
        
        Sprechen Sie Deutsch? Ich kann... Sie koennen warscheinlich nicht. Ich bin nicht ein Berliner 21:48:07 12/02/99 (1)
        
        Ja, aber ich kann. Cobber 11:05:38 12/25/99 (0)

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Comments:	> Humbly walking along this elf is quite short for his race standing only, five foot seven inches. You notice that his body is lithe as he draws in his emerald cloak. Drawing the cloak you notice his hands are permanently stained with, which appears to be black ink. Dressed more formally than most travelers, with dark blue leggings and a forest green vest with a cream shirt beneath. He is topped with a crimson plumed hat and that the feather is actually a pen. His golden skin shines like rays of sunlight. His deep blue eyes seem to complement his nature. Even with his kind eyes, they missed nothing as they roam the surrounding area.