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Posted by Zebulost on November 29, 1999 at 22:13:31:

In Reply to: Looking to improve on this description posted by Daedric on November 29, 1999 at 21:54:56:

Though lithe, Daedric is quite short for an elf: his stride broken to a
humble gate. Clutching his emerald cloak closed are hands perma-
nently stained with black ink. He is dressed far more formally then
most who travel the land, wearing dark blue leggings of a sturdy
velvet, a vest in a forest green brocade, and a cream shirt of a
delicate silk. Perched on his head is a floppy hat adorned with a
great plume that appears to double as a quill. His complextion is
that of the golden dawn, contrasting his midday deep blue eyes.
His eyes, like his nature, are kind yet constantly aware of all that
transpires.

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to be picky Gate is Gait Graham 06:02:51 11/30/99 (12)
- Indeed. And complextion is complection. N/T Zebulost 06:21:47 11/30/99 (11)
  - Erm, try "complexion" N/T Pendragon_Surtr 17:22:48 11/30/99 (10)
    - n/t Um, ok. Funny, I found 'complection' at dictionary.com... 'complexion' has more references though. Zebulost spells neighbour with a 'u' 22:00:57 11/30/99 (9)
      - Look here people, CF is in AMERICA, SO YOU'LL USE OUR SPELLINGS AND LIKE IT! no text, that is all Red, White, and Blue through and through 05:44:50 12/01/99 (8)
        
        You use our Flag's colours as well as our language, you may as well use the correct spellings for the words (nt) Union Jack 13:33:24 12/08/99 (3)
        
        No see we beat your redcoat wearing asses bad enough to warrant our dominion over you. nt Red, White, and Blue through and through 05:56:39 12/09/99 (2)
        
        Blow it out your arse, Yank Union Jack 08:08:25 12/09/99 (1)
        
        Get a dental plan Brit. nt Yank(ees) RULE! 11:52:32 12/09/99 (0)
        
        I don't think zo Americano, we vill spell it zee German way. Spracen dedoich (No Text) Heir Gerber 14:24:38 12/01/99 (3)
        
        You mean Sprechen die deutch? German Corrector 20:33:47 12/01/99 (2)
        
        Sprechen Sie Deutsch? Ich kann... Sie koennen warscheinlich nicht. Ich bin nicht ein Berliner 21:48:07 12/02/99 (1)
        
        Ja, aber ich kann. Cobber 11:05:38 12/25/99 (0)

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Comments:	> Though lithe, Daedric is quite short for an elf: his stride broken to a > humble gate. Clutching his emerald cloak closed are hands perma- > nently stained with black ink. He is dressed far more formally then > most who travel the land, wearing dark blue leggings of a sturdy > velvet, a vest in a forest green brocade, and a cream shirt of a > delicate silk. Perched on his head is a floppy hat adorned with a > great plume that appears to double as a quill. His complextion is > that of the golden dawn, contrasting his midday deep blue eyes. > His eyes, like his nature, are kind yet constantly aware of all that > transpires.