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Posted by Gobnait on March 26, 2000 at 17:30:24:

In Reply to: Looking for comments on Role: posted by Trannie on March 26, 2000 at 04:03:29:

> ***** was born practically in the middle of nowhere. His parents had always traveled, searching for a chance to make some gold here or there... Trying to make their lives better, possibly by taking advantage of others. As it happened, *****'s mother, *****&, died during her son's birth. Being between the Drow city in the Sewers and the surface, there were no healers or medicine men around to help deliver the child. ***** was given a form of his mother's name as a symbol of respect. Afterwards, *****'s father went into a deep depression... Even his need to take advantage of others was lost and his will to live diminished. He died not long afterward. As a result, ***** has been on his own since he was quite young.


Unless your role involves telling tales, just the first part I left is plenty. You might consider a _summary_ (as in only the size of this first part) of the rest of it, but it's really rather long-winded. The story didn't really grab me as it was.

*shrug*

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